The table below shows oil production figures in four Africans countries from 2000 to 2004, in barrels per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows oil production figures in four Africans countries from 2000 to 2004, in barrels per day.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart shows the production of oil in four different countries. The litters are calculated for a day.
Besides the
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The
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table
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summarised between 2000 to 2004 which is for 5
years
.
Reportively
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Reportedly
it is assumed that there
are
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is
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inflation and deflation between the
years
. The first country is Nigeria. In 2000 the
litters
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litter
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measured
is
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was
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205000 and in 2004 it
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was
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reported as 213000. In the middle
these
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of these
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two
years
there are some
increase
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increases
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and
decrease
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decreases
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. But it did not have any big difference.
Second
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The second
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country on the list is Chad. Surprisingly
this
country did not produce oil for the three
proceeding
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preceding
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years
and in the
last
two
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two,
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the yield was very low compared to the others. Which might cause loss. The Fourth is Somalia.
This
place produced 5000, 8000, 17000, 21000, 50000 in the five
years
. If taken into notice,
it is clear that
the quantity has been
incresed
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increased
every year. But among all the places
this
takes the second
last
position.
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