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Many people have lost their job as a result of covid-19 pandemic. What can the government and individuals do to solve d problem.

#people #job #covid-19 #pandemic #government #individuals
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A lot of people no
more
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having
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 a job to do when
in
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the spread of the
Covid
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COVID-19
 19virus. The responsibility of
government
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the government
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 is to initiate
its
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 by organising all the
health
 professionals to bring it the
contro
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control
. The
government
 has the
soul
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sole
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 power and resources to initiate all plans to bring
this
 calamity under control. In
a the
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 first place by organising all the
health
 professionals through
series
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a series
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 of meetings and researching the possibility to find
vaccine
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a vaccine
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 which would be used on the infected persons. If the the
government
couldn't
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 get a vaccine in land within the country, it must reach out
help
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 outside the country, more importantly
world
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World Health Organisation
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health
 organisation.
This
 organisation has
a
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joint
health
 professionals throughout the world, with the collective
join
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 efforts from
specialist
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specialists
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 strong enough to be able to solve the problems. In
this
situation
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 finding has to be help from other organisations living in the country to support the
government
.
That is
 one of the responsibilities of an entity with the society in which it operates. In a nutshell, is the responsibility of the
government
 to mobilise the resources necessary to fight
this
 pandemic. The people or citizens are there to support the necessary initiative taken by the
government
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Task Achievement
Ensure you fully understand and respond to all parts of the task. Your essay does not clearly address how individuals can contribute to solving the issues caused by COVID-19 layoffs, focusing instead on the government's role in controlling the pandemic rather than unemployment.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduce your essay with a clear thesis statement that outlines your main points. End with a concise conclusion that summarizes your argument and reaffirms your stance.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each centered around a single main point. Use connective words ('however', 'in addition', 'furthermore') to help guide the reader through your argument and make your reasoning easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Include specific examples or hypothetical scenarios to support your main points. This helps illustrate your arguments and makes your essay more persuasive and engaging.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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