You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...................,
Dear Rahul,
I hope you are doing well. I got your letter regarding
an advice
on Remove the article
advice
a piece of advice
a bit of advice
wheather
to go to Correct your spelling
whether
college
or try to get a job
.
Firstly
, I would suggest you to
try getting a Fix the infinitive
apply
job
because you won't be able to enjoy going to college
. If you got an admission in
a Change preposition
to
college
far from home, the travel will be hectic for you and according to
my experience job
is better than college
.
Correct article usage
a college
Furthermore
, a job
will teach you many role based
learnings and you will definitely get practical knowledge on the things which you can't gain from Add a hyphen
role-based
college
. Every company provides training to their employees, so they will definitely train you to do things and you will start earning earlier.
Lastly
, I think you should get a job
which is a combination of your I.T
field and Customer service like Technical advisor or something like that. Correct your spelling
IT
This
will teach you professional communication skills and many other things. Please let me know if you'd like to chat further
on this
topic.
Yours faithfully,
TirthSubmitted by tirththakkar23 on
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task achievement
To improve your task response score, ensure that you expand on each point you make. For example, when suggesting not going to college due to travel being hectic, provide more details or personal anecdotes to make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
For a better coherence and cohesion score, work on linking your ideas more smoothly. You could use transitional phrases like 'Moreover,' or 'In addition to' when moving from one paragraph to another. This will help your letter flow better and appear more structured.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetition of ideas or phrases to enhance your logical structure score. Each paragraph should introduce and expand on new information. This keeps the reader engaged and emphasizes your points more effectively.
task achievement
Consider revisiting the letter's tone to ensure it remains consistently informal or formal throughout, as this impacts the suitable writing tone score. Your letter mostly maintains a friendly tone which is good, but ensure this consistency throughout.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,