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Nowadays, more people would instead purchase food than cook at home. ‎What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?‎

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In recent years the trend of eating outside
food
 has become common
,
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 because people feel it is easier and convenient rather than preparing it
in
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 the kitchen. In my
opinion
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 there are more benefits than disadvantages which are elaborated
below
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 with examples. My foremost stand for
this
 statement most of the family person working in urban areas with their busy schedule so they will not have enough
time
 to prepare
food
 on the weekdays
hence
 they will prefer to purchase readymade
food
 from restaurants after work
while
 going toward home.
this
 will save their
time
 and make them relax about arranging foodstuff for cooking and they can give their
time
 to family members and children. My second stand is the variety of the
food
 options available in the restaurants. So, we can purchase
food
according to
 our family members' preference, by that all family members are happy
for example
 my
favorite
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food
 is vegetable noodles, if
i
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 wish to have it in my home after office hours, it is more difficult to arrange the necessary stuff for
preparation
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 of vegetable noodles,
instead
 of taking headache about
this
i
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 will prefer to buy from outlets.
On the other hand
, daily consuming outside
food
 is not a better option for health because concerning
about
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food
 hygiene is poor and the ingredients
of
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 preparing
food
 are of Low quality. In conclusion, it is a good option to buy or
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food
 from outside at weekends or whenever feel
tiredness
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 from the preparation but not all the
time
. Homemade
food
 is healthy and nutritious so always put more effort into having your own prepared dish.
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Make sure to clearly address both the advantages and disadvantages in a balanced way. While your essay does touch on both sides, it could benefit from more explicit comparison and contrast between the advantages and disadvantages.
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Introduce your essay with a more comprehensive overview. Clearly state the advantages and disadvantages you plan to discuss to give readers a clear expectation of your essay's structure.
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Use transition words and phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs, such as 'However', 'Additionally', 'On the other hand'. This will improve the flow of your essay and help with coherence.
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