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The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how many tourists visited specific Carabeen
Island
 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
,
although
 the
number
 of
visitors
 who stay
in
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cruise
ship
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ships
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 and
island
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islands
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 experienced a decrease in some years, both graphs significantly increased from 2010 to 2017. In the first year about 0.25
million
 out of 1
million
visitors
staid
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stayed
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in
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cruise
ship
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ships
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 and
other
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others
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 (0.75
million
) visited from
island
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the island
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.
Visitors
 from
cruise
ship
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ships
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 increased to 0.5
million
,
while
visitors
 staying
in
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island
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the island
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 remained steady in
next
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the next
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 year. The
number
 of people who visited from
island
 dramatically increased to 1.5
million
 among 2
million
of
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visitors
 in two
next
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year
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years
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 and after that remained stable from 2013 to 2015. The
number
 of
visitors
 from
island
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the island
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 after a dropped in 2016, escalated to 1.5 in 2017.
In
contrast
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 the
visitors
 of
cruise
ship
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ships
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 experienced a fall in 2012, climbed moderately for the rest of five years,
reached
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and reached
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to
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2
million
 of 3.5
million
visitors
 in 2017. The
number
 of total visitor
growth
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grew
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 from 1
to3.5
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to 3.5
million
 without any
decrease
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decreasing
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 trend in
this
 seven-year period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, visitors, cruise, ship, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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