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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows data about the number of
death
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rates
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 and
birth
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rates
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 in New Zealand in 1901 and forecasts it changes until 2101.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
birth
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 rate started at a higher point and consistently stayed above the
death
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rates
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 from the past to the present day.
However
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, there will be a reduction of newborns and
death
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rates
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 will overtake the
birth
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rates
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 in 2041. In 1901,
birth
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rates
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 started at 20,000 and continued to stay higher than
death
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rates
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 in the next few
years
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. It witnessed a fluctuation in the next 60
years
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 and reached a peak of 66,000 in 1961. After a drop to 50,000 after 20
years
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, the
birth
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 rate recovered from it and decreased slightly to 45,000
at the end
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 of the century.
In contrast
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, the data of deaths began at less than 10 thousand people and had increased steadily to 2001.
Although
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 underwent erratic values over the 100-year period,
death
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rates
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 are expected to grow rapidly from 2021 to 2101, take over
its
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 counterpart in 2041 and stay stable at under 60,000 in the
last
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 40
years
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words death, rates, birth, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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