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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting qnd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting qnd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps provide
an information
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information
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 about
island
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the island
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, before and after the renovation of some tourist facilities. Generally, the island is surrounded by sea north and south.
Also
, even though the buildings have been constructed, the trees
did
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were
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 not damaged or harmed.
To begin
 with, a lot of construction
have
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has
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 been built,
such
 as a restaurant, a
reception
, a bunch of accommodation, etc.
Overall
, the facilities are located in the west of the island.
The
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 centre of the
constructions
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construction
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 the
reception
 is being seen and it is surrounded by a
ring-road
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ring road
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. The west and the east sides of the
reception
 have
plethora
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a plethora
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 of accommodations which
is
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the tourist temporarily resides.
Moreover
, the accommodations are in
shape
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the shape
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 of
circle
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a circle
the circle
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 and there
are
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is
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 a footpath which connects with each other.
Also
, north of the
reception
has
Verb problem
is
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 the restaurant which
also
 has a vehicle track that
wired
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is wired
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 with the
ring-road
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ring road
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.
Therefore
, the outside of the land has
the
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a
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 pier
that is
also
 located in the south.
Also
,
the
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apply
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next to the pier some boats are shown.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reception with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist facilities
  • natural landmarks
  • recreational facilities
  • infrastructure
  • environmental degradation
  • economic benefits
  • landscape
  • aesthetic
  • accommodations
  • sustainability
  • construction
  • development
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • conservation
  • impact
  • utilitarian
  • tourism industry
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