The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams demonstrate the life phases of a species of large fish named
salmon
. The first illustration shows the fish's reproduction process
along with
the destinations where they belong in different cycles of their lives. The other one gives information about the three main physical
development
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developments
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of
salmon
.
Firstly
,
salmon
eggs under the reeds live in
upstream
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the upstream
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river which has
leaisure
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leisure
pleasure
flowing for approximately 5-6 months until they turn into 'fry'. It is the first level of
salmon
's physical growth which is 3-8 long.
Then
, the fry will live in a lower river with quick movements for about 4 years. After that, they shift into smolt which has
12
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-15 cm length.
Subsequently
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Subsequently,
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they move into the open sea and reside there for nearly 5 years and
converts
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convert
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into adult
salmon
which is 70 - 76 cm long.
Finally
, the mature
salmon
spawns its egg and the life rotation of it restarts again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater streams
  • small pebbles
  • reeds
  • alevin
  • yolk sac
  • nourishment
  • fry
  • grow stronger
  • grow larger
  • parr
  • defined markings
  • estuaries
  • smolt
  • adapt to saltwater
  • ocean
  • full size
  • sexual maturity
  • spawn
  • life cycle
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