The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams demonstrate the life phases of a species of large fish named
salmon
. The first illustration shows the fish's reproduction process along with
the destinations where they belong in different cycles of their lives. The other one gives information about the three main physical development
of Fix the agreement mistake
developments
salmon
.
Firstly
, salmon
eggs under the reeds live in upstream
river which has Add an article
the upstream
an upstream
leaisure
flowing for approximately 5-6 months until they turn into 'fry'. It is the first level of Correct your spelling
leisure
pleasure
salmon
's physical growth which is 3-8 long. Then
, the fry will live in a lower river with quick movements for about 4 years. After that, they shift into smolt which has 12
-15 cm length. Correct article usage
a 12
Subsequently
they move into the open sea and reside there for nearly 5 years and Add a comma
Subsequently,
converts
into adult Correct subject-verb agreement
convert
salmon
which is 70 - 76 cm long.
Finally
, the mature salmon
spawns its egg and
the life rotation of it restarts again.Submitted by buyabuya201 on
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