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The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart below gives information about the number
of
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revenue in Vietnam with three
pizza
 brands by dola
millions
 in
period
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the period
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 2017.
It is clear that
whereas
 the
domino
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Domino Pizza
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pizza
 and the
pizza
company
 had the same pattern,
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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was fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 constantly in the
reasearch
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research
. In January, the first month of
year
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the year
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,
domino
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Domino Pizza
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pizza
 and the
pizza
company
 started at about 32
millions
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million
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, in the next month, both two places dropped by 20
millions
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million
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. After the
declined
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, there was a soar quickly, the profit of
domino
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Domino Pizza
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pizza
was
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rocketed from 12 to 25
millions
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million
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along
with
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the
pizza
company
' increase was between 10 and 17
millions
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million
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respectiely
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respectively
 in June.
Domino
pizza
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 peaked at 41
millions
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million
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in
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July-which was more than the
pizza
company
 with 30
millions
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million
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,
then
,
while
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the domino
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domino
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 brand
decresed
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decreased
subtaintial
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substantial
 in 4 final months, the
pizza
company
 rose gradually with
the
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 total similar
domino
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 at 35
millions
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million
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dola
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dollars
. In
pizza hut
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Pizza Hut
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, there was a
fell
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 in 3 months, before the
decreased
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 from June to September, it showed a
samll
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small
 rise
by
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of
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 5
millions
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million
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. Following
3
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the 3
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last
 months of the year, the total was stable to vacillate at 3
millions
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million
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 dola.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, millions, domino, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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