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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The supplied tabular column shows that the quantity of ready
meal
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meals
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ate up
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increased
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 in Melbourne. It
also
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 compares the five main types of processed food at three different times.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 took the highest place in 2005 which was consumed in 40
units
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.
Moreover
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, the fried chicken held approximately the same parts which is 35. The other types of convenience food
comes
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 in the least place which is of 5units of salad, 6
units
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 of fried rice and noodles. In the contemporary world, the consumption of both
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fried chicken is nearly the same which is 38 and 37
units
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.
Besides
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 that, the portion of salad has been surged to 15.
While
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 there is a rise in segments
such
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 as fried rice and noodles which is 9 and 8. The table
also
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 predicts some changes in
the
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apply
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2025 where
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 will be eaten in 51
units
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 and fried chicken in 45
units
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. It
also
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 anticipates that the salad will shoot up by 41
units
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. Despite
this
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, the fried and noodles will
held
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 the same parts as 9.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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