There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to the company arrive. The manager has asked for suggestions on how the reception area could be improved Please write a letter to our manager. In the letter • Describe the complaints • Say why the reception area is important • Suggest how the reception area could be improved
Dear Sir ,
I hope
this
letter finds you in a radiant of health and great spirits . I am writing this
letter to give my suggestions how
we can tackle the problems regarding the reception area which is a crucial part of our company.
I have heard from our customers and employees about the restricted place which is Change preposition
on how
a
main reason Correct article usage
the
of
the congestion at the reception and people didn't get Change preposition
for
proper
place to sit which is a result of Add an article
a proper
line-up
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the line-up
hence
, this
thing devalues the image of the company . The reception area is very significant which reflects the uniqueness of the prestige building where people can get knowledge and information about the jobs and careers .
My suggestion is to remove the three seater sofa and install sectional
sofa Correct article usage
a sectional
this
way , more sitting arrangement
will be available. Fix the agreement mistake
arrangements
Moreover
, the artificial plants should be replaced by the original plants thus
, availability
of oxygen will be increased Correct article usage
the availability
hence
, the individuals will not feel suffocated.
I hope you will consider my opinion and I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
JaiSubmitted by Kaurharvinder2984 on
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