The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005.

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The line graph highlights data about three various types of crimes which

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happened in England and Wales between 1970 and 2005. Looking from an

overall

perspective, it is clearly seen that car theft and house burgling were the prevalent kinds of crimes during the given period,

whereas

the reverse was true for street robbery. Looking into details, as regards car theft, in 1970 the quantity of

this

kind of crime was the highest with 0.4

million

which was twice the figure for house

burgling

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and approximately four times the figure for street robbery. After that, it saw a significant increase which

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reached 1

million

in 1990,

then

it soared to 1.6

million

in 1995.

However

, it witnessed an enormous drop (1

million

) in the subsequent years. As for house

burgling

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burglary

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, it was

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similar trend

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car theft until 1980, after which it experienced a

fluctuate

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and

then

declined to nearly 0.5

million

in 2005. With regard to the number of street

robbery

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robberies

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, it levelled off until 1995 which was followed by a slight

grow

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in the following years.

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The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005.

Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In some countries, it is now possible for people to buy a wide variety of foods transported from all over the world. To what extent do the benefits of this development outweigh the drawbacks?

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