The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005.

The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows three different crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005.
The line graph highlights data about three various types of crimes which
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happened in England and Wales between 1970 and 2005. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is clearly seen that car theft and house burgling were the prevalent kinds of crimes during the given period,
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the reverse was true for street robbery. Looking into details, as regards car theft, in 1970 the quantity of
this
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kind of crime was the highest with 0.4
million
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which was twice the figure for house
burgling
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burglar
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and approximately four times the figure for street robbery. After that, it saw a significant increase which
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reached 1
million
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in 1990,
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it soared to 1.6
million
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in 1995.
However
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, it witnessed an enormous drop (1
million
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) in the subsequent years. As for house
burgling
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, it was
the
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similar trend
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car theft until 1980, after which it experienced a
fluctuate
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and
then
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declined to nearly 0.5
million
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in 2005. With regard to the number of street
robbery
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robberies
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, it levelled off until 1995 which was followed by a slight
grow
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in the following years.

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