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The gap below shows the production levels of the three main textile fibres in Australia since 1983 with a projection for 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releveant.

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The graph illustrates the
quantitiy
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quantity
 of
productions
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production
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 of several textile fibres in Australia from 1983 to predicted 2019. On the whole, there
are
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is
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 a decrease in wool
abd
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and
 nylon and an increase in polyester. One of the noticeable
point
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 is that the production level of wool is decreasing but
highest
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 in all three productions throughout the period. Specifically, the level was about 900
tonnes
 in 1983, and
then
 there was a significant decrease from 1990 to 1993. After that,
once
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it increased to about 800
tonnes
 by 2002, but
then
,
have been
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it
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 decreased again from
the
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 time.
In addition
, nylon product levels are
also
 decreasing. It was the second highest from 1983 at 600
tonnes
 to 2006 at about 350
tonnes
. Interestingly, the levels have been the
least
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lowest
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from
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since
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 2007 and will decrease
at
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to
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 around 150
tonnes
 by the end of the period in 2019. The final point to note is that there are significant
increasing
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increase
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 in polyester, which started at 100 in 1983
tonnes
 but will
rose
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rise
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 to 500
tonnes
 in 2019.
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coherence cohesion
Try to structure your essay in a clearer way by organizing it into more distinct paragraphs - one for the introduction, one for each main point, and a conclusion. This will help the reader follow your analysis more easily.
task achievement
Enhance your introduction by explicitly mentioning the types of textile fibers discussed. This provides a clearer context for the reader from the beginning.
coherence cohesion
In the conclusion, briefly summarize the main trends for each textile fiber. A conclusion helps to round off the essay and gives the reader a sense of closure.
coherence cohesion
Include more varied sentence structures and transition words to improve the flow of your essay, making it easier and more enjoyable to read.
task achievement
Make sure your descriptions of trends are precise. Using phrases like 'significant decrease' should be supported with specific figures where possible.

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