The diagram below shows how avocado oil is extracted. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how avocado oil is extracted. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the diagram is information pertaining to the different stages of making avocado grease.
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, there are 9 stages, beginning with softening the berry before washing
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being crushed and blended where it is split to collect the coat, being filled, bottling and ready for contribution. The initial stage focuses on the berry being collected and soft in order to remove the rotten ones and keep the good quality product. After that, it is washed and
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goes through the crusher and blender so as to remove seeds and skins, ready to pass 2 stages of splitting. Splitting to receive the grease is the purpose of the later stage. As the mixture went to the centrifuge stage in the range of 45 and 50C, it was split to separate the solids and liquids
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separate the grease and water. Simultaneously, the solid waste
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seeds, skins and rotten grain will be transported to the orchard which helps the plant grow faster
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the wastewater is removed.
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, the oil comes across the filter and is clarified before being bottled and ready for distribution.
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