The graph gives information about drinking habits of the US population by age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph indicates information concerning the US population's drinking habits by five categories of
ages
.
Looking at the Fix the agreement mistake
age
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that most people
have the Never drink
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at
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age
.
A cursory Fix the agreement mistake
ages
glanc
at the data reveals that Correct your spelling
glance
people
who have the
no experience of drink over 50% in the ages from 16 to 64 years. Correct article usage
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However
, 65
-74 years group Correct article usage
the 65
people
declined slightly accounting over
40%.
Another eye-catching trend is that having Change preposition
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people
decreased slightly in 25-34 and 35-44 ages however
, it rapidly increasd
and the highest percentage was in the Correct your spelling
increased
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from 65 to 74.
A more detailed look at the graph Remove the redundancy
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reveal
that having heavy drinkers and light Change the verb form
reveals
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drinkers
people
show the
shape that increases with age and Correct article usage
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then
decreases again.Submitted by wowoo04066 on
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