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the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.

the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. write at least 150 words.
#town #galsdon #supermarket #two #sites
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The map shows us two possible sites for a new supermarket
for
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in
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 the
town
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 of Galsdon.
Overall
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, we can see that
railway
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the railway
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 and main roads
is
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are
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 going to Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon populations. The first potential location s1 is outside of the
town
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 located
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in
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on
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in
show examples
Correct article usage
the north-west
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north-west
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the north-west
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 which
named
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is named
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 Hindon with
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a 10,000
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10,000
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a 10,000
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population
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. You can get there on a train. There
also
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have
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is
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 a railway where you can reach
to
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apply
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s2 and to the Cransdon supermarket it is
also
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llocated
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located
 outside.
Moreover
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, it is very convenient
to
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for
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 people to get to
the
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apply
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Cransdon there
have
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has
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 a huge amount of
population
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. It is near to
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Town
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the Town
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 Centre. If you
will
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go
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in
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to
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 the
Town
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 centre you can travel to
Bransdon
Correct article usage
the Bransdon
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population
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with
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which
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15,000
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is 15,000
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population
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 and
a distances
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a distance
distances
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16
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of 16
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 km. 
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, the
Town
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 centre
no
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has no
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 traffic zones and it would be difficult to find
car
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a car
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 parking zone. You must
to
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apply
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traver
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travel
 by train and spend money on it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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