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The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007
The map illustrates how
a
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apply
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Petland
city
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City
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 developed between 1950 and 2007.
Overall
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, the town was dramatically transformed and today offers new households and
wide
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a wide
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 range of facilities
such
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 as
cinema
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a cinema
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, stores and a recreation ground. Looking
further
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 into the details, in the north of the Petland a new stretch of road was built to link the yacht marina to the city. In 1950 was a parking lot in the east.
However
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, in 2007 was relocated
in
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 the west and turned into a multi-storey car park. In the north-east was built a new
apparment
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apartment
 area and a variety of shops. Meanwhile, a grassland was converted into
housing
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a housing
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 estate in the south-east.
On the other hand
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, in the north-west a new
swiming
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swimming
 pool and park was constructed. In 2007 was developed a new cinema.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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