The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.

The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.
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The line graph provides information about the
number
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of unemployed young people in
England
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from the year 1993 to 2012.
Overall
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, the percentage of jobless people has increased over time.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of the unemployment rate in
London
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and the
rest
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of
England
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decreased
at the end
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of the period. The
number
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of unemployed residents aged 16-24 in
London
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was significantly higher than the same age bracket in the
rest
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of
England
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. In 1993, there were around 23% unemployed adolescents in
London
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,
while
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there were only 17% in
England
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. In
London
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,
this
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rate dropped until 1999 to under 15%, the lowest in the period.
However
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, in 2004 it rose again to 18%, and reached 25% in 2012, the highest unemployment rate in
London
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. The
number
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of jobless people in the
rest
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of
England
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dropped by 2004 by approximately 12% and it increased in the following years reaching its peak in 2012 at 20%. The
overall
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ratio of jobless citizens in
London
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and
England
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went down over the period. In
London
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, there were around 14% in the beginning,
while
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there were only 10% in the
rest
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of
England
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. Both ratios dropped until 2005 and from
then
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on the
number
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fluctuated reaching 9% in
London
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in 2012, whilst it reached 7% for the
rest
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of
England
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at the end
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of the year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, england, london, rest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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