The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.

The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.
The line graph provides information about the
number
of unemployed young people in
England
from the year 1993 to 2012.
Overall
, the percentage of jobless people has increased over time.
On the other hand
, the proportion of the unemployment rate in
London
and the
rest
of
England
decreased
at the end
of the period. The
number
of unemployed residents aged 16-24 in
London
was significantly higher than the same age bracket in the
rest
of
England
. In 1993, there were around 23% unemployed adolescents in
London
,
while
there were only 17% in
England
. In
London
,
this
rate dropped until 1999 to under 15%, the lowest in the period.
However
, in 2004 it rose again to 18%, and reached 25% in 2012, the highest unemployment rate in
London
. The
number
of jobless people in the
rest
of
England
dropped by 2004 by approximately 12% and it increased in the following years reaching its peak in 2012 at 20%. The
overall
ratio of jobless citizens in
London
and
England
went down over the period. In
London
, there were around 14% in the beginning,
while
there were only 10% in the
rest
of
England
. Both ratios dropped until 2005 and from
then
on the
number
fluctuated reaching 9% in
London
in 2012, whilst it reached 7% for the
rest
of
England
at the end
of the year.
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