Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which cause many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to enourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Many manufacturers
food
and drink products contain high levels of sugar which Change preposition
of food
cause
health problems. Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
This
essay disagree
with the Change the verb form
disagrees
with the
statement above. In my opinion, If the product goes higher that does not mean people will stop Remove the redundancy
apply
baying
it they will continue using the products more and more.Correct your spelling
buying
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very often that doesn't stop people from buying it
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changes
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so many health problems and people get sick and Correct your spelling
cause
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some young children are addicted to sugar in general and they can't live without it Add a comma
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allows
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allow
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite