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The bar chart shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates survey results on five Australian
cities
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’ residents’ routines in purchasing and consuming tea and
coffee
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 in the
last
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four
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 weeks.
Overall
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, in
four
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 out of five
cities
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, people prefer to go to a café for
coffee
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 or tea,
while
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 in
Adelaide
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 buying instant
coffee
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 is the most favoured one. The figures for the bought fresh
coffee
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option
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 show that Sydney has the highest percentage with slightly below 45 per
cent
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.
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 followed by Melbourne, Hobart,
Adelaide
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 and Brisbane respectively. Brisbane stands as the lowest with just under 35 per
cent
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. In all
cities
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,
this
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 purchase
option
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 is the least preferred out of the three categories. In bought instant
coffee
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 preference, Sydney has the lowest number of just above 45 per
cent
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,
while
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 Hobart stands with the highest number of almost 55 per
cent
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.
This
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 buying
option
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 is the second most preferred in
four
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cities
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, except for
Adelaide
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, in which
this
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option
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 is the most favoured.
Lastly
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,
the
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they
show examples
 went to a café preference stands as the highest number in
four
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cities
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. Melbourne and Hobart show the highest percentage of around 63 per
cent
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,
whereas
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Adelaide
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 shows the lowest one with around 49 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, four, cities, adelaide, option, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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