Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Although
many individuals think pupils need to study a
language
when they get in high school, I agree with the idea of
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them
this
kind of
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in
kindergarden
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kindergarten
because
kids
have more brain plasticity and are more interested in learning. In
this
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I will discuss both
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of view and explain my opinion. On the one hand,
adolescent
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have
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lack
of
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attention to
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. Is
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that teenagers are less interested or
envolve
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involved
involve
in learning a new
language
rather than
kids
.
Moreover
, we live in a technological time and young people have more
distractors
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around, like video games, computers and
movil
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mobile
apps.
Consequently
, they pay less attention to new academic skills.
For example
, a lot of teenagers prefer to spend time
palying
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playing
video games rather than studying a new
language
.
On the other hand
, is
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that is
better for
kids
learn
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as much as they can at an early age. Specifically, children have more brain plasticity than adults and because of that it is easy for them to get more knowledge.
In addition
, schools
prepared
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kids
for
this
new era we are living
by
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getting
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skills like a new
language
.
Consequently
, children are more interested in learning through different techniques, so they can learn faster than others.
For instance
, a recent research conducted by Boston University has shown that
kids
who practice
language
at
kindergarden
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kindergarten
have better academic conditions.
To conclude
, studying a
language
at high school
do
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not help youngsters to get knowledge easily.
However
, teaching children since
kindergarden
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kindergarten
will allow them to get new skills for
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. In my
opinion
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I agree that sooner is better and
kids
should learn a new
language
at an early age.
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Introduction Clarity
Ensure your introduction sets up the structure of your essay effectively and clearly states your opinion. Consider using a more specific thesis statement to guide the reader through your discussion.
Sentence Structure
Work on varying your sentence structures and using a wider range of linking words to improve fluidity and connections between ideas.
Balanced Discussion and Specific Examples
While discussing both sides, make sure to provide an equal amount of detail and depth to each viewpoint. Additionally, incorporating more specific and varied examples to support your points could strengthen your arguments.
Spelling and Grammar
Be cautious of spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'movil' (mobile), 'palying' (playing), and 'envolve' (involve). Regular proofreading can help to minimize these errors, enhancing the overall clarity of your essay.
Conclusion Clarity
In your conclusion, effectively summarize your discussion and restate your opinion clearly, ensuring it aligns with the arguments presented in your essay. This reinforces your position to the reader.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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