In order to solve traffic problems should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays,
traffic
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is one of the major issues in almost
countries
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. There is a debate about putting
taxes
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on private
car
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owners
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apply
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to enhance public transportation. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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I will discuss the reasons why there are benefits and drawbacks of
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action. The benefit of additional
taxes
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to
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private vehicles is greatly helpful to
government
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the government
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because
this
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helps improve
the
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apply
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public transportation by adding infrastructures
such
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as roads, bridges, railways, and tunnels that will reduce
traffic
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congestion,
road
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and road
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accidents and promote convenience to consumers.
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, if there are wider
road
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roads
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and alternative routes there will be
decrease
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a decrease
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in
traffic
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volume and
traffic
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accidents.
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Also
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the maintenance of the
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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will be addressed because there is funding from private
car
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taxes
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.
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, there are more disadvantages of paying high
taxes
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for personal
car
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owners just to have the solution to
traffic
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jam
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.
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is an extra
expenses
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and burden for those who own vehicles.
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will force them to either sell the
car
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or stop using it.
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,
for
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those who want to own a
car
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will have
a
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apply
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second thoughts
of
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about
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purchasing
brand
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new
car
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or even
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a second
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second hand
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car
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because of the imposed
taxes
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.
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, travelling to far and secluded places without the use of their private cars is much harder and difficult because not all places have
accessed
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to government roads.
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, the automobile businesses like
car
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rentals, will definitely slow down
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less consumer of their product. In summary, in order to lessen the
traffic
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problem, the public sector should find another solution aside from taking heavy
taxes
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to
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on
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private
car
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owners because many
consideration
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considerations
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involved
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in
this
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matter.
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Task Achievement
Use a more clear and structured introduction. Clearly state your thesis and outline the main points of discussion to provide a roadmap for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more varied linking words and phrases to improve flow. This will help in connecting ideas more smoothly and enhancing the coherence of your essay.
Task Achievement
In the body paragraphs, develop your ideas more deeply. Include more detailed examples and analyze the implications of these examples. This will strengthen your arguments and make your response more complete.
Task Achievement
Ensure a balance in discussing both advantages and disadvantages. Develop both sides equally to provide a well-rounded essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on creating a stronger conclusion. Summarize the main points of discussion and reiterate your stance convincingly. This encapsulates your essay effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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