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Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that it is better
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university
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students
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 should learn whatever they are interested
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while
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 others believe that they should prefer studying
subjects
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 that are needed
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 their
future
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 profession.
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essay will discuss both sides of
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 problem. On the one hand,
university
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students
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 can be more successful when they do what they like. When people do their
favorite
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 things, they finish
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 easily and never suffer from
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, Some
students
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 cannot get good enough
grade
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on
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 some
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 that they do not like. It means they do not do their assignments or they do not understand these
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 because of their
interests
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. In my opinion, if
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 choose their
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subjects
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, It might be more efficient and they might never get bored
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 their
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, They can work more effectively when they do what they enjoy.
On the other hand
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, there are many
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 who have different things
interests
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 which are related to their hobbies and their
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 professions.
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, there are many
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 who have different
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 from their
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 professions. If they study what they like
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 of studying
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 which are needed
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 their
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.
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, children’s
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 and hobbies become more different, and they might get bored
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 their leisure in
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 and
then
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 they start suffering from
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.
This
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 situation can ruin their careers. In conclusion, I believe that
university
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students
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 should choose which
subjects
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 are useful for them. If
students
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 choose the right way, they will be more successful in the
future
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Introduce the topic and your thesis statement in the introduction, support your ideas with examples in the body paragraphs, and summarize your points in the conclusion.
coherence
Improve the variety and accuracy of your linking words to enhance your essay's coherence. Words like 'Furthermore', 'However', and 'Consequently' can help create more coherent connections between your ideas.
content
To strengthen your task achievement, ensure your essay fully addresses all parts of the prompt. Include a more detailed discussion of the views mentioned and make your own opinion clearer throughout the essay.
examples
Use specific examples to support your points. These examples should be relevant and detailed to illustrate your arguments better. Avoid general statements that do not add value to your essay.
language
Work on grammar and punctuation. Even small mistakes can distract from the quality of your argument. Consider using online tools or textbooks to practice and improve your grammar skills.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Motivation
  • Well-rounded education
  • Critical thinking
  • Job markets
  • Economic demand
  • Skilled workers
  • Practical application
  • Innovation
  • Societal progress
  • Passion
  • Pragmatism
  • Future job prospects
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