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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summsrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summsrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The two
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separated
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 tables illustrated information about both bananas and coffee
commerses
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commerces
commerce
 of
Fairtade
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Fairtrade
- labelled in five countries of European in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, in 2004,
purchase
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the purchase
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 of
banana
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bananas
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 was the highest
million
 which was 47 euro
million
 in Switzerland from
other
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the other
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 4 countries.
Controversly
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Controversy
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, the lowest sale was
banana
 of
Belguim
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Belgium
 in 1999 which was only 0,6
million
. Let's see the details
,
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 when
trade
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the trade
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 of coffee
of
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 five countries in 1999 compared to each other, it approximately did not
shown
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 any
dramatically
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 differences and at most Denmark's
commerse
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commerce
 was greater
of
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by
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 1
million
 than
Sweden
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Sweden's
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.
Hovewer
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However
, in 2004,
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the Uk's
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Uk's
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UK's
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 purchase of coffee dominated for
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 amount of money
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2004. For
banana
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sales
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sale
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sales
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, even though Switzerland earned only 15
million
 by trading
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bananas
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banana
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bananas
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, it could be
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a priority
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priority
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a priority
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 sale
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of
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 1999.
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opposite
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 side,
for
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Belgium was the most inferior indicator of
table
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the table
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.
Whereas
, in 2004, Switzerland could show remarkable
commerse
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commerce
of
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for
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banana
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bananas
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 which was 47 euro
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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