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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the information about
sales
 of Fairtrade which labelled
coffee
 and bananas between 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. In the first table, it
described
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describes
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 the statement of
coffee
 and bananas.
Unit
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 of each
tables
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 is
showed
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shown
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 as millions of
euros
.
Overall
, within 5 years,
sales
 of
coffee
were
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increased the most in
UK
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the UK
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 by 18.5
millions
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of
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euros
.
Then
, it
has
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increased
merely
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 some
euros
 in other countries which were Switzerland by 3
euros
 and 0.7
euros
 of these
coffee
sales
 sold in
Belguim
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Belgium
 respectively.
However
,
in
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Sweden and
in
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Denmark had
a
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the
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 same increases which were 1.8 to 2 and 0.8 to 1.
Firstly
, in bananas
sales
 in Sweden and in Denmark, there are tendency
of
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 decrease.
Secondly
,
UK
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the UK
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 had the highest increase among all countries and
then
, Switzerland and
Belguim
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Belgium
 had similar
rate
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rates
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 in
sales
 of Fairtrade-labelled
banana
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bananas
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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