The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table
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the information about
sales
of Fairtrade which labelled
coffee
and bananas between 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. In the first table, it
described
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the statement of
coffee
and bananas.
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of each
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is
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as millions of
euros
.
Overall
, within 5 years,
sales
of
coffee
were
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increased the most in
UK
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by 18.5
millions
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of
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euros
.
Then
, it
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increased
merely
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some
euros
in other countries which were Switzerland by 3
euros
and 0.7
euros
of these
coffee
sales
sold in
Belguim
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Belgium
respectively.
However
,
in
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Sweden and
in
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Denmark had
a
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same increases which were 1.8 to 2 and 0.8 to 1.
Firstly
, in bananas
sales
in Sweden and in Denmark, there are tendency
of
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decrease.
Secondly
,
UK
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the UK
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had the highest increase among all countries and
then
, Switzerland and
Belguim
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Belgium
had similar
rate
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rates
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in
sales
of Fairtrade-labelled
banana
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bananas
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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