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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
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 the information about
sales
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 of Fairtrade which labelled
coffee
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 and bananas between 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. In the first table, it
described
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 the statement of
coffee
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 and bananas.
Unit
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 of each
tables
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 is
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 as millions of
euros
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.
Overall
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, within 5 years,
sales
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 of
coffee
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were
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increased the most in
UK
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the UK
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 by 18.5
millions
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of
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euros
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.
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, it
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increased
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 some
euros
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 in other countries which were Switzerland by 3
euros
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 and 0.7
euros
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 of these
coffee
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sales
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 sold in
Belguim
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Belgium
 respectively.
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,
in
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Sweden and
in
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Denmark had
a
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the
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 same increases which were 1.8 to 2 and 0.8 to 1.
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, in bananas
sales
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 in Sweden and in Denmark, there are tendency
of
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 decrease.
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,
UK
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the UK
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 had the highest increase among all countries and
then
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, Switzerland and
Belguim
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Belgium
 had similar
rate
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rates
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 in
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled
banana
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bananas
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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