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IN MANY COUNTRIES THERE IS A PROBLEM WITH DECLINING QUALITY OF AIR AND WATER FROM BOTH INDUSTRY AND CONSTRUCTION.WHAT MEASURES COULD BE TAKEN TO PREVENT THIS?

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NOWADAYS,IN MANY PARTS OF THE WORLD THERE IS A DILEMMA ABOUT DECREASING
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QUALITY
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THE QUALITY
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 OF
AIR
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WATER
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 BECAUSE OF INDUSTRY AND CONSTRUCTION.
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THE
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SOLUTIONS
SUCH
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 AS PROPER WASTE SEGREGATION AND LOWERING CARBON DIOXIDE EMISSION. HAVING TO STIPULATE RULES AND
REGULATION
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REGULATIONS
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 ON PROPER WASTE DISPOSAL CAN IMPROVE THE
WATER
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QUALITY
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 OF THE ENVIRONMENT.
AS
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 CAN MINIMISE THE BLOCKAGE FROM THE
WATER
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 PIPELINE
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 THE RIVERS.RESEARCH SHOWS THAT
DISPOSING
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 GARBAGE PROPERLY CAN HELP THE
ENVIROMENT
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ENVIRONMENT
PRODUCE CLEAN
WATER
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TO
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 THE PEOPLE.
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 ACT IS OF GREAT HELP TO MAINTAIN THE
QUALITY
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 OF
WATER
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. INDUSTRY AND CONSTRUCTION SHOULD HAVE A STANDARD LEVEL OF CARBON DIOXIDE EMISSION.TO CONTROL THE BAD FUMES THAT ARE RELEASING TO THE
AIR
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.THEY SHOULD BE PROPERLY GUARDED TO MAINTAIN THE
QUALITY
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 OF BREATHABLE
AIR
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.
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, GOVERNMENTS
SHOUL
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SHOULD
 CHECK THEM ONCE A MONTH TO ENSURE THAT THEY ARE FOLLOWING THE STANDARD PROTOCOL.
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,PEOPLE WILL
BREATH
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BREATHE
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 FRESH
AIR
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FAR
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 FROM RESPIRATORY DISEASES. IN CONCLUSION,MANY COUNTRIES ARE SUFFERING FROM ENVIRONMENTAL POLLUTION BECAUSE OF INDUSTRY AND CONSTRUCTION.
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MINIMISED
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 THE PROBLEM OF
AIR
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 AND
WATER
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QUALITY
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.SO THAT PEOPLE CAN LIVE A HEALTHY LIFE.
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Task Response
Provide a wider range of solutions and delve deeper into how these can realistically be implemented. Offer specific examples to illustrate your points, making your argument stronger and more compelling.
General
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution control regulations
  • emissions
  • discharges
  • green technology incentives
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable materials
  • waste management policies
  • recycling processes
  • environmental monitoring
  • compliance with environmental standards
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental protection
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • modern building techniques
  • international environmental organizations
  • air and water quality management
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