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(SOFIA) You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter – Describe the problem the new employee has caused – Explain how other colleagues feel about the new employee’s conduct – Say how you expect the manager to address the situation.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about my concern recently hired employee in
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our
office
. Please let me explain the issue which
me
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 and other
colegues
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colleagues
 of mine
are
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 facing since his appointment. From the
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beginning
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 first day, he started irritating me with his rude attitude. He
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became
behave
 all of us in an improper way. You know very well that he is not
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punctuate
punctual
punctuated
 in his timings so his
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unpunctuality
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affects
 other employees
also
. He
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 not feel ashamed
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 his insulting behaviour with our
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clients
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 too.
This
 type of practice
puts
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bad
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 impact on our clients. If you want to maintain a
peacefull
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peaceful
 and
dutifull
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dutifully
dutiful
atmosphare
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atmosphere
 in the
office
, You should take
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serious notice of my complaints.
This
office
 is like my home and I always felt
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myself
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 a family member of
this
deparment
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department
. In my
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opinion
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 you should take a proper step to resolve
this
 issue, Before
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it's
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 too late. Let me explain one more
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thing
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, that I have no personal issues with him. I never
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 you down. I hope you take serious action
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office
. Yours Faithfully, Kunwar
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a distinct focus: introduction, issue description, impact and request for action. This will enhance logical progression.
Coherence & Cohesion
Pay attention to the appropriate use of linking words to improve flow between ideas (e.g., consequently, moreover, however).
Task Achievement
Provide specific examples of the employee's behavior and its impact to make your concerns more persuasive.
Task Achievement
Adopt a more formal and respectful tone when addressing HR, avoiding overly casual phrases and ensuring politeness.
General
Consider revising for spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors to enhance clarity and professionalism.
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