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Some people think the best way to solve traffic congestion in cities is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. Is it good or bad, to what extent do you agree?

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It is argued that urban
traffic
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congestion
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 can be successfully solved by providing nonstop free public
transport
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.
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 essay completely agrees with the statement. As far as I am concerned, bringing in free public
transport
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 will highly decrease the occurrence of
traffic
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congestion
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, because it is more rapid and
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, more affordable.
To begin
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 with, by using nonstop public
transport
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, the community will save
up
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a great amount of money. In fact, it is less costly for those who can not afford to use their personal car on a daily basis.
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, in California, the government introduced a similar law that considerably reduced the
traffic
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congestion
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 and was chosen by individuals, because they had to pay a substantial price for the tickets.
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, a study shows that public
transport
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 is preferred by people
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 its rapidity.
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, over the years, in the urban areas, a great number of people stopped using their own vehicles, because they lost precious time being stuck in
traffic
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 and started to use
the
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public
transport
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.
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,
due to
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 its flexible program, individuals have the opportunity to commute by bus whenever they
need
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. A good example is represented by Bucharest’s public
transport
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 network
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that
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 is overused at night by people who want to go home. Undoubtedly, commuting by bus or subway is more efficient and avoids urban
traffic
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congestion
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. In conclusion, implementing free public
transport
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 is vital for avoiding
traffic
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congestion
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 in cities. I consider that it should be prioritized
primary
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 for its cheap payment and flexible schedule and
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 the fact that it enables the community to choose a less expensive way of
transport
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