You have reccently moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all the communication there. Write a letter to your bank Branch. In this letter mention: -Where you have moved? -What problem are you facing regarding the bank's communication? -What do you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you about
bank
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the bank

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branch ,so the bank sent to my old
address
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continues all the
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information
pieces of information

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however
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, I already moved
another
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to another

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country. I moved
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to korea

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korea
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Korea

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in
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to

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Seul, it was my dream city and, I
enter
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entered

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to
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apply

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yonsein
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yonsei

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university located in Seul.
Cause
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Because

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I was moved. There are
have
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apply

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a
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apply

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many
of
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apply

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banks but, they say
my
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apply

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all
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Use synonyms

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Use synonyms

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communication
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my communication

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sent
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is sent

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old
address
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.
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As well as
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Also

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, I can not
sent
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send
be sent

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communication
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it is
problem
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a problem

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. I want them to do regarding old
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for deleted it and I can
I
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apply

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open
new
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a new

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address
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and I will have
new
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a new

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address
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in Seul.
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Linking Words

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Linking Words

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Also
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Also,

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my home
located
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is located

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near
the
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apply

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yonsein university
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Yonsein University

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. And
i
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I

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am
student
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a student

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. There are my
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is new and I won't
my
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have my

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old
address
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sent to
communication
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.
And the
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The

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communications return me
,
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apply

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because it is valuable
me
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to me

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especially
it
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if it

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is
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apply

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will be my mother's and
families
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family's

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letter
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letters

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return
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returned

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it my new
address
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. I ask
to
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you to

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sent
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send

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address
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my all the
informations
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information
pieces of information

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.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours

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faithfully, La Lisa,

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structure
Try to organize your ideas more clearly with separate paragraphs for each point.
content
Ensure that each paragraph contains one main idea and a few sentences that explain or support it.
coherence
Use transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
grammar
Check for and correct grammatical errors to enhance the clarity of your message.
task response
Make your request and the details about it (e.g., new address) clear early in the letter.
content
You effectively communicated the main issue and what you want the bank to do.
tone
Your polite tone is suitable for the context of writing to a bank.
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