Your colleague has invited you for his farewell party. You will not be able to attend the party, write a letter to your friend Explain the situation, Say why you will not be attending, Say something about the period you have worked together

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Dear Ahsan, Hope you doing well. it's been a

while

since we met each other. I received your letter and

glad

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am glad

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to hear that

you

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your

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colleagues planning to arrange

farewell

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a farewell

the farewell

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party in

you

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your

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honour. I wish I could join

this

beautifull

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beautiful

event but I could not. I

realy

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really

appreciate your kindness towards me but you know about my job's

responcibilties

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responsibilities

Unforchunately

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Unfortunately

, I have to visit

abrod

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abroad

next month for official meetings. So I

could

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will

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not be able to join you. I feel

shamed

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ashamed

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and accept my

appolozees

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apologies

for

inconvenience

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the inconvenience

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. But I assure you that after

mey

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return, I came to you and we both

orginize

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organised

it again. You always live in my heart,

Although

time

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times

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has

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have

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changed. I hope you will

remeber

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remember

the days when worked

toghather

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together

. That was a

memorible

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memorable

time for me and I, never forget the most

fantastice

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fantastic

time of my life. I know, you have

same

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the same

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feeling for me. After a month

otr

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two

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two,

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I'll come to you till

then

enjoy yourself with your

resopectable

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respectable

colleagues. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar

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Coherence & Cohesion

Make sure to proofread your letter for typos or grammatical errors, as these mistakes can distract from your message. For example, 'I realy appreciate your kindness towards me but you know about my job's responcibilties.' should be corrected for spelling and use of apostrophes.

Coherence & Cohesion

Improve your letter's logical structure by clearly separating your ideas into paragraphs with distinct purposes: one to explain your inability to attend, another to express regret and a third to reminisce about past experiences together. Ensure that each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence.

Task Achievement

Enhance the letter by directly addressing each point from the task: clearly state the reason for your absence, express regret, and share a memorable experience or sentiment about your time working together. While you have touched on these points, providing more specific details and a clearer expression of your feelings could strengthen your response.

Task Achievement

Consider adopting a more formal tone in places where it slips, such as 'it's been a while since we met each other.' Formal correspondence benefits from consistent tone and careful choice of words, which ensures the letter maintains an appropriate level of professionalism throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

173 words

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Your colleague has invited you for his farewell party. You will not be able to attend the party, write a letter to your friend Explain the situation, Say why you will not be attending, Say something about the period you have worked together

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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