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Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives than to other workers.To what extent do you agree or disagree？

#companies #salaries #ceos #executives #workers #disagree？
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whether
corporation
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is
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ought to pay higher stipends to CEOs and
executives
 or not.
While
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executives
 deserve
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better treatment. The
executives
 are qualified for better treatments for owning more precious experience.The
executives
 are always the seasoned staff who found the enterprise or participated in
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 an early period, they are more familiar with the market and personal management which matters a lot in administering the working programs well.
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 as
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task distribution and personnel arrangement.
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,
the
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better pay is considered as
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 working class
along with
 esteem from other
staffs
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,which will provide them
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sense of achievement. The people who enjoy a prior tier in
company
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 are equipped with
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 education background and
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 undertaken though series of practical challenges.When
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 with problems or
dilemma
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, the scientific and appropriate decisions made by them can directly judge the fate of the
company
.
Besides
, they are prone to have a broadened social relationship and connections that promote the cooperation between enterprises which do help to the development of the
company
.It is universally acknowledged that the trend in
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 business environment is to work with others and cooperation opportunities erected by
executives
 play an indispensable role in enhancing
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competitiveness. In conclusion，I agree that corporation is supposed to give CEOs and
executives
a
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higher pay and I am firmly convinced that
company
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 that
provide
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 higher
salary
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 to
executives
 will perform well and be able to avoid
pitfall
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 in
the
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future development.
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