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NOW a days people are using more consumer goods like refrigerators or washing machines. Does it has more advantages or disadvantages

#people #consumer #goods #refrigerators #machines
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In the modern world,
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people
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 use more
consumer
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products
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. For their convenient
life
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. which have many
impact
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to
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on
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 their
life
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.
such
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 as air
condition
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for
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 control room temperature and cleaning
robot
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for
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 clean their room. In
this
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consumer
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 goods.
To begin
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products
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 for
life
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 are convenient.
Consumer
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products
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 can reduce
time
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 of cleaning the home.
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, the clean robot can
be
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clean a room and wash the floor
in
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at
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 the same time.
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, one of the benefits is improved working efficiency in the working day.
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, smartphones can improve the efficiency of a design career by using
their
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application like Goodsnote. Some
people
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 think that
consumer
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products
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 can emerge
a
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new
stlye
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style
 of living. Because they
having
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 more time for relaxing.
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, the drawbacks when
consume
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consuming
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 more
in
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apply
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products
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 like
machines
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.
People
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 will have lazy
habits
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 because
machines
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 can replace their
working
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.
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, employee skills would reduced when employees less working in their jobs task. It is undeniable that lazy
habits
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 that
imapct
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impact
 to many
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people
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life
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. It
bring
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 bad
habits
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 to their
live
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Although
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machines
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that
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apply
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make bad
habits
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to
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for
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people
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,
but
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apply
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machiens
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machines
 that can
helping
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help
be helping
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people
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 enhance their
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life
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lives
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.
To conclude
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, there are many benefits and
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of consuming more
in
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apply
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products
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 like
machines
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. Some
people
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 believe there are hidden disadvantages of
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machines
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 usage.
However
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, the major advantages of
products
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 can
outweight
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outweigh
 the drawbacks. Because it
bring
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conveninet
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convenient
convenience
 and
improve
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 efficiency to
people
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life
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