The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

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The bar graph demonstrates the information about the percentage change in the contribution of international learners who have graduated

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Canadian universities in 8 different provinces from 2001 to 2006 from the chart, it is noticeable that the number of international learners graduating was on the rise during the 5 year period. It

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can be seen that in both 2001 and 2006, New Brunswick remained at the university with

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percentage of graduates that come from

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universities in 8 different provinces. In 2001, on the top with more than 6%

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students graduated Are New Brunswick,

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and Quebec. Alberta and British Columbia came close with nearly 5 % , followed by Manitoba, Ontario, Newfoundland and Labrador at around 2.4% to 3 % In 2006, the percentage of international

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year, and the institution continued to hold the top spot. A considerable upward trend was

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significant rise, rising from approximately 5% in 2001 to over 10% in just five years.

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Topic Vocabulary:

percentage change
share of international students
university graduates
Canadian provinces
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economic conditions
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The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

Many people think that painting and music do not directly improve the quality of people. Therefore, governments should not spend too much money on artistic projects. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc.to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think foreign visitors should be charged more than local people when they visit the cultural and historical attractions in a country To what extent do you agree or disagree?