The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international 

students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 

2001 and 2006.
The bar graph demonstrates the information about the percentage change in the contribution of international learners who have graduated
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Canadian universities in 8 different provinces from 2001 to 2006 from the chart, it is noticeable that the number of international learners graduating was on the rise during the 5 year period. It
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can be seen that in both 2001 and 2006, New Brunswick remained at the university with
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percentage of graduates that come from
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universities in 8 different provinces. In 2001, on the top with more than 6%
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students graduated Are New Brunswick,
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and Quebec. Alberta and British Columbia came close with nearly 5 % , followed by Manitoba, Ontario, Newfoundland and Labrador at around 2.4% to 3 % In 2006, the percentage of international
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Brunswick
saw a remarkable increase, perking to 12 %
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significant rise, rising from approximately 5% in 2001 to over 10% in just five years.
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  • percentage change
  • share of international students
  • university graduates
  • Canadian provinces
  • increase
  • decrease
  • overall trend
  • notable similarities
  • economic conditions
  • immigration policies
  • numerical values
  • reputation of universities
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