the chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one countr in 2013, 2015 and 2017

the chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one countr in 2013, 2015 and 2017
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on
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people get
news
from the various media in the unknown country in three different periods 2013, 2015 and 2017.
Overall
,
it is clear that
television was the most popular
news providing
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mode of media than others. In detail, in terms of television, it had just below four-fifths of
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the Population
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watched
then
this
was reduced considerably by around 68
percent
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in 2015,
then
there was a slight increase in 2017, at 70 per cent. In 2013,
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the Newspaper
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Newspaper
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way of
news
had.just above
two-fifhs
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two-fifths
while
Radio and
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the internet
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internet
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were equally popular, which accounts for almost 32%.
Similarly
, In 2015, Radio mode of accessing
news
had the same proportions in newspapers and Ratio, at 30 per cent. Surprisingly, there was a
remain
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unchanged in Radio
news
in both periods in 2015 and 2017
,.
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which accounts for 30%.
In contrast
, in terms of
internet
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the internet
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, in 2013,
this
was
day
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almost 31%, following the given period it
was
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increased slightly by
two-fiths
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two-fifths
two-faiths
, surprisingly there was a dramatic
grow
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in 2017, which was around 69%.
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