Currently, more and more people respect elders and become convinced that old people should live with their families, which is in contrast to the view that old people should live at a nursing home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the past, the view that old people should live with their family is more common in most

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Asian countries.

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western countries tend to have the view that old people should live at a nursing

home

. Currently,

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living with family

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the pros and cons of living with family and living at a nursing

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. Living with family has advantages

as well as

disadvantages. The advantages are the

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are more comfortable and less lonely living with their

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in their own

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. If there is an emergency happened, there will be someone

home

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such

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home

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is a nurse or a doctor, or families

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to hire a

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nurse to take

care

of their grandparents. Living with

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can lead to stress and arguments between

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and

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advantages and disadvantages. The pros of

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professtional

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have all the essential

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nurses and

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full of people

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the same age, the

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will have a lot of friends and

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great nursing

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costly.

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are unwell manage which can cause

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unwanted from not living

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family. In my opinion, when my parent

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older, I want them to live with me to avoid the feeling of

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and left out.

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for them.

This

decision with be costly but it's the best way to balance between me and their feeling.

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Introduction

Ensure the essay introduction clearly addresses the task, presenting a brief overview of both views and your stance.

Structure

Use a more structured approach to organizing paragraphs: one for discussing the advantages and disadvantages of living with family, another for nursing homes, and a separate conclusion to restate your opinion.

Clarity & Precision

Be precise and clear in presenting ideas. Avoid vague statements and ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by examples or reasons.

Grammar & Spelling

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Coherence & Cohesion

Utilize linking words effectively to improve the flow of your essay and ensure each section transitions smoothly to the next.

Fully explain your ideas

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4 paragraphs

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

emotional well-being
sense of belonging
unique insights
wisdom
family dynamics
integration
busy household
professional care
specialized facilities
medical needs
social isolation
intergenerational interaction
peer engagement
tailored activities
financial implications
burden
professional care facilities
evolving perceptions
elder care
cultural influences
social factors
economic factors

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Currently, more and more people respect elders and become convinced that old people should live with their families, which is in contrast to the view that old people should live at a nursing home. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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some people say that in all level of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.