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Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are studying for a qualification, and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Ask for some time off to complete a qualification. Suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. Say how the qualification helps your job or company. You do NOT need to write any addresses. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr.John, I am writing
this
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 letter to request
for
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some time off to complete a qualification for which I
am
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 preparing for the past
one
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month. Currently, I am working on a
ceritification
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certification
 in data analysis and I have an exam next week to successfully complete it. So, I would like to request a leave of absence for two days in order to finish the test. I know we have a lot of backlog work
which is
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pending from
last
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 week but I can assure
that
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, I will complete all
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 work once I am back from my vacation. I am
also
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 aware that the project presentation is due
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for
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the end
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end
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 of next week and just wanted to let you know that I have already completed it and submitted the same to the team lead for review. If completed successfully,
this
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 will help us
in identifying
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 the latest trends
of
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 our company sales and we can avoid
the
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unnecessary expenditure for the organization. I hope you can understand and grant me permission to take some
time-off
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 from work. Best Regards Raghav

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task achievement
To further improve your task achievement score, aim to elaborate more on how the qualification specifically benefits your role or the company. For example, mention specific skills or knowledge areas that will be enhanced and how they align with company goals or projects.
coherence and cohesion
While the overall structure of your letter is good, introducing clearer paragraph breaks or headings to separate the introduction, body, and conclusion can enhance readability and coherence. Consider using transitional phrases to smoothly link your ideas from one paragraph to another.
coherence and cohesion
To improve your single idea per paragraph score, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point. For example, dedicate one paragraph explicitly to the request for time off, another to your plan to compensate for the workload, and a separate one to discuss the benefits of the qualification.
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