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The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

The graph shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.
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The line graph highlights the change in
population
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 between 1940 and 2000 in
Columbia
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,
Yamhill
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, and
Washington
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.
Overall
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, the number of
population
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 in each county has steadily increased over the
years
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. The chart outlines three
years
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, which are 1940, 1970, and 2000. In 1940,
Columbia
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 had only less than 30,000 citizens, a slight difference from
Yamhill
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 which reached exactly 30,000.
In contrast
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,
Washington
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 has a way higher
population
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 than the other two counties, with about 75,000 people. In the next 30
years
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,
Columbia
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's
population
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 has risen to slightly over 30,000,
whereas
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Yamhill
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's has risen to 45,000. Unlike the other two,
Washington
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's
population
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 has increased significantly by about 50,000 so the current
population
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 is over 120,000. Going into 2000, both
Columbia
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 and
Yamhill
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 have added up to around 40,000 people to live there. Giving them a total of citizens as high as 75,000 and 90,000.
On the other hand
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, the number of people who live in
Washington
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 has doubled, becoming more than 240,000. In conclusion, the
population
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 in all three counties has steadily increased over the
years
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 at different rates. The county with the highest upturn rate among them is
Washington
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, which makes it the most populated county as well.
While
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 the rest of the counties have a way lower rate
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 number of
population
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, columbia, yamhill, washington, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • growth rates
  • economic opportunities
  • migration patterns
  • environmental conditions
  • rapid growth/decline
  • industrial development
  • natural disasters
  • governmental policies
  • historical data
  • economic conditions
  • environmental sustainability
  • technological advancements
  • social implications
  • economic implications
  • environmental implications
  • infrastructure demands
  • natural resources
  • community life
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