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The diagram below shows the five levels of Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the five levels of Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisons where relevant.
Maslow
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’s Hierarchy of Needs Explained Professor of Psychology Abraham
Maslow
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 proposed to use a system called
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 of needs it was used with others for popularity and
influence
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 people which
lead
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to
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him to bring the best
psychologist
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 minds of the twentieth century together.
Maslow
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would study
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 animal and
human’s
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 behaviour which
allow
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 him to get
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 insight into
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complex and basic needs. As he was creating his method
Maslow
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 divided the
humans
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 needs into five categories which included: love and belonging, physiological needs, safety and security, self-esteem, and self-actualization. He
then
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 had to propose that the needs can be ranked by how important things are or how basic it is.
Maslow
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 that our own ability to have those needs would have an impact on our own psychological health.
Maslow
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also
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 thought that our own psychological health would be negatively impacted by not
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 able to meet the fundamental needs which
goes
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 towards the bottom of his pyramid. 1.Physiological Needs. These are the things that mean the most to
use
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us
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 to survive like staying warm,
sleep
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,
eat
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 and staying healthy. 2.Safety and security.
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next
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the next
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 level that provides us with safe and secure surroundings for
yourself
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ourselves
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,
children
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, and other people. 3.Love and belonging. Once you have a safe and secure
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 you can focus on being
contacted
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to
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 other people in your life. 4. Self-esteem
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this
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 should be at the top of your own hierarchy our own feelings are the ones that make
feel
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 good about ourselves. 5. Self-actualization.
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the
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 top of your pyramid where you can express who you really are and achieve all of your goals.
This
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 was written by me as
this
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this
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time. 14:27 Hrs on the 23/03/2024

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