The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Enhancement in humanity’s lives should be the
prior
aim of science. The writer agrees with the mentioned opinion Correct word choice
primary
due to
both direct
and indirect Correct article usage
the direct
contribution
of Fix the agreement mistake
contributions
Add an article
the scientist
scientist
.
Science has been examined for a long time for innovating more Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
efficent
methods or searching truths. Because of their wisdom and curiosity, people are never tolerant to keep conducting activities which Correct your spelling
efficient
have
many drawbacks. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Therefore
, our ancestors started to use tools made of bronze and iron to increase the
productivity and Edison invented electronic bulbs which Correct article usage
apply
allow
people to do night shifts. Another example is a scientist Wrong verb form
allowed
debated
against a stereotype that said the Sun revolves around the Earth, leading to Wrong verb form
debating
further
exploration in
the weather and Change preposition
of
the
space.
Scientists’ research sometimes be criticized Correct article usage
apply
worthless
, but yet in some way, they still bring advantages to people’s lives. Many people argue Change preposition
as worthless
scientist
should not devote Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
to
Correct pronoun usage
themselves to
invent
new weapons as these tools can only destroy lives. Wrong verb form
inventing
However
, despite the fact that Hiroshima and Nagasaki were ruined by nuclear bombs, there are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
evidences
Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
point
out that there would be more loss of economy and Wrong verb form
pointing
soldiers’lives
if the war continued. Correct your spelling
soldiers
In addition
, investing in the army can help a nation do
not suffer from occupations from others. Unnecessary verb
apply
Moreover
, it is believed that scientists should not make efforts to preserve and observe animals, but actually, imbalance in habitats can cause unknown catatrospheres
Correct your spelling
astrospheres
while
understanding animals’ characteristics can provide many keys to solve
serious problems Wrong verb form
solving
such
as climate change or other Correct your spelling
environmental
enviromental
issues
In conclusion, the crucial goal of science should be enhancing qualities of life. Correct your spelling
environmental
While
some inventions such
as jet engines directly benefit humanity, some
others still have some positive impacts in some aspects.Correct quantifier usage
apply
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