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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Enhancement in humanity’s lives should be the
prior
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 aim of science. The writer agrees with the mentioned opinion
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 both
direct
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the direct
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 and indirect
contribution
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 of
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the scientist
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scientist
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scientists
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. Science has been examined for a long time for innovating more
efficent
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efficient
 methods or searching truths. Because of their wisdom and curiosity, people are never tolerant to keep conducting activities which
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 many drawbacks.
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, our ancestors started to use tools made of bronze and iron to increase
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productivity and Edison invented electronic bulbs which
allow
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 people to do night shifts. Another example is a scientist
debated
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 against a stereotype that said the Sun revolves around the Earth, leading to
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 exploration
in
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 the weather and
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space. Scientists’ research sometimes be criticized
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, but yet in some way, they still bring advantages to people’s lives. Many people argue
scientist
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 should not devote
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themselves to
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invent
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 new weapons as these tools can only destroy lives.
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, despite the fact that Hiroshima and Nagasaki were ruined by nuclear bombs, there
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evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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point
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 out that there would be more loss of economy and
soldiers’lives
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soldiers
 if the war continued.
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, investing in the army can help a nation
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not suffer from occupations from others.
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, it is believed that scientists should not make efforts to preserve and observe animals, but actually, imbalance in habitats can cause unknown
catatrospheres
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astrospheres
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 understanding animals’ characteristics can provide many keys to
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 serious problems
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 as climate change or other
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environmental
enviromental
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environmental
 issues In conclusion, the crucial goal of science should be enhancing qualities of life.
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 some inventions
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 as jet engines directly benefit humanity,
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others still have some positive impacts in some aspects.

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coherence cohesion
Focus on more precise and varied sentence structures to improve the clarity and flow of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your introduction and conclusion for stronger impact and a clearer portrayal of your stance on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points with more detailed explanations and analysis to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Ensure you fully address the prompt by discussing both sides where applicable and clearly stating your position in the introduction.
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Incorporate a wider range of relevant examples to support your points, illustrating the impact of science on improving lives in diverse ways.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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