Many people believe that family has a greater influence on a child’s life and development than other factors like friends, TV, music and so on. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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lives . Family is the first school of a human being . One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people who believe that in
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a good number of people opine the notion they believe other sources like television , newspaper ,
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Expand your essay to include a clear introduction, at least two body paragraphs detailing your main points, and a conclusion. This helps structure your essay and provides a clear stance on the topic.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Developmental psychology
  • Socialization
  • Inculcate
  • Role models
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Agents of socialization
  • Primary caregivers
  • External influences
  • Nurture vs. nature
  • Cognitive growth
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Parental guidance
  • Absentee parents
  • Genetic predispositions
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