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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two graphs demonstrate the current appearance in
Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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industrail
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industrial
area
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 and the development plan for future constructions of
this
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 location respectively. There is a
road
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 on the south side of the
area
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,
while
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 in the middle of
this
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 main
road
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, there is a round
road
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 expanding
on
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to
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 the north which is surrounded by three factories. On the east exist of
this
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 round
road
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, a route
paralling
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parallel
 with the
road
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 on the south is built with two
factorcies
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factors
 on both sides respectively. Meanwhile, a factory is located at the eastern tip of
this
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 route. The town is opposite the
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 buildings. Across the river on the northern side of
this
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area
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, there is a spacious farmland with no
architectures
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architecture
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.
However
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, in the future, a small round
road
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 will be added in the middle of the main
road
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on
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in
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 the south part of
this
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area
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while
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 shops and
medical
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a medical
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 centre will be built next to the expanding
road
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. Two routes will be constructed on the northern and north-western sides equipped with housings. As for the routes
paralling
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paralleling
paralysing
 with the main
road
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, the surrounding factories are going to make way for three apartments, a playground and a school. The town will
ramain
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remain
 unchanged but the route across the river will connect with a
road
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 on the north side of
this
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area
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 adjacent
with
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to
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 housing.
Overall
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, the
area
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 will be equipped with more
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 and
housings
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housing
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 rather than surrounded by only factories in the future.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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