The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017. Summarise it.

The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017. Summarise it.
The graph demonstrates how many times different age groups visit emergency care in Northern Ireland, the data from December 2016 and December 2017 is compared.
Overall
, it is
edvident
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evident
from the data that, the segments under 5 and over 75 were the most
friquent
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frequent
users of the hospital.
Also
,
it is clear that
the number of visitors
were
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bigger in 2017. It is
intersting
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interesting
to note that there is a drastic difference between people with age
from
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65 to 74 and those who are older than 75 years. People over
75 year
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75-year
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attende
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attended
attend
hospital for two times
often
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than every other
segement
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segment
except children under 5 years. The middle segments are
opproximately
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approximately
at the same number of attendances, in between 20 and 30 per 1000 population.
Also
it is noticeable that teenagers
has
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the healthiest bodies,
hence
they are visiting hospital the least.
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