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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph and pie charts
shows
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show
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 the relationship between
age
 and crime and types of crime in
UK
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the UK
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last
 year. On the whole, the rate of criminal
age
 increased from
12-year-old
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12 years old
 and decreased
from
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to
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20-year-old
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20 years old
, and there were four main types of crime. About the
age
, specifically, there were almost 0% from the
age
 of 0 to 8 , but there are 5% in
12-year-old
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12-year-olds
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. There
were
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was
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significant
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a significant
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 increase from 12 to 16 at 70%. The highest rate of
criminal
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crime
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 was
20-year-old
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20 years old
 at 80% but
decrease
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decreased
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 after
the
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apply
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age
. The rate was down to 20%
in
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at
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 the
age
 of 28, and after that, the proportion
was decrease
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was decreased
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 gradually. The most popular type of
crimes
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crime
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 was
violent
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violence
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. Looking more closely, about half of its type was violent. Following that, there was 23% of property criminals, 22% of drag criminals and 9% of public order
criminal
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criminals
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last
 year in the UK.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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