The diagram details the process of making wool. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture shows the procedures by which
wool
is processed and transformed into variety
of products.
(Add an article
a variety
Overall
)Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that processing wool
involves initial
stages of preparation of the raw source material, Correct article usage
the initial
middle
stages constituting the production of tufts, and the final stages resulting in yarn and finished consumer products.
First of all, the process begins when sheep Correct article usage
the middle
wool
is sheared by machine,cleaned very well from any dirty and then
dried through dried machine. Subsequent to this
the raw product is spun accourding
Correct your spelling
according
spinning
tools and Change preposition
to spinning
then
either made into a string (with some being recycled as by product
) or turned into Add a hyphen
by-product
wool
.
Final
stage,the Add an article
The final
wool
is form
into tufts of Change the verb form
is formed
wool
and then
stored in the store. The last
steps involve turning the tufts into balls of yarn which can then
be used for knitting or for fabrication of consumer retail items such
as jackets and carpets.Submitted by fatema14mohammed on
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