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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or college lecturer. 
Write at least 150

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or college lecturer. 
Write at least 150
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The bar
chart
 below shows eight different
groups
 and how many
hours
 a week are working and the pie
chart
 under, the occupation of people suffering from stress,
also
Add a missing verb
is also
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 divided
in
Change the preposition
into
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 eight
groups
.
Overall
, as it can be seen in the bar
chart
,
business men
Correct your spelling
businessmen
show examples
 and
movie
 producers work more than others. First of all, the bar
chart
 shows eight different
groups
 and how many
hours
 are
spending
Wrong verb form
spent
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 a week. Chefs, lecturers, and lawyers are working the least amount of
hours
, under 40
hours
 every week. Writers and programmers
are working
Wrong verb form
work
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 around 45
hours
approximately
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apply
show examples
and exactly 40
hours
 as
a programmers
Correct the article-noun agreement
a programmer
programmers
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. Moving forward to the
movie
 producers and
business men
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businessmen
show examples
, the amount of
hours
spending
Wrong verb form
spent
show examples
 at work goes over 50
hours
 each, 60
hours
 for a
movie
 producer and 70
hours
 for a
business man
Correct your spelling
businessman
show examples
.
Secondly
, when
is
Verb problem
it comes
show examples
about
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to
show examples
 stress, programmers, writers and Lawyers, the percentage of stress is under 10 per cent. The most stressful group is lecturing, with 25 per cent,
then
 the other four
groups
 (
business men
Correct your spelling
businessmen
show examples
, doctors, chefs and
movie
 producers) which are below 20 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, groups, hours, business, movie with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • analogy
  • correlation
  • data-driven
  • discernible trends
  • discrepancy
  • empirical evidence
  • fluctuations
  • longitudinal study
  • meticulously
  • percentile
  • predominantly
  • quantitative analysis
  • spectrum
  • statistical significance
  • threshold
  • variances
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