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The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The bar chart compares the
export
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 earnings from five different categories in 2015 and 2016
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 the table illustrates the percentage change in
export
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 amount in 2016 than that of the previous year.
It is clear that
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 petroleum and engineered
products
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 were the main
export
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 earners both in 2015 and 2016, and the
export
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 amount increased in 2016 in comparison with that in 2015 except for gems and jewellery commodities. Petroleum
products
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 earned over 60
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015
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 and climbed slowly by 3% to nearly 64
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016. There was a similar pattern in engineered goods,rising from 56
billion
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 in 2015 to 62
billion
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 in 2016.
Although
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 textile
products
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 accounted for the lowest income through
export
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, produce income grew noticeably by 15.24% to over 30
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016.
Conversely
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, the figure for gems and jewellery was over 44
billion
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 in 2015 and dropped by 5.18% in 2016.
In addition
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, the earnings from agricultural
products
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 remained basically unchanged (31
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and 32
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, products, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export categories
  • percentage change
  • economic implications
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • fluctuations
  • international trade relationships
  • top-performing categories
  • least performing categories
  • export values
  • global market trends
  • export priorities
  • economic strategies
  • future prospects
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