The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or college lecturer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups.

Describe the information shown to a university or college lecturer.
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average
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the averange
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average
number of hours worked per week and
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portion
proportion
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proportion
of people suffering from stress in eight groups of
amongst
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professional
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the bar chart
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group
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business men
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businessmen
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approximately
worked
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70 per week.
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of
business men
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businessmen
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worked hard over of all in
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, the lowest in
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.
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has worked around 25
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per week.
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stress
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illness
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giving
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of lecturers has a highest around
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chart
bacause
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because
the lecturers have many
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responsible
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research
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a student and
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laboratory
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group
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of movie producers have
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illness
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from
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about 18 per cent and have
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around
60
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per week
, Though
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group
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of lawyers, writers,chefs, business and
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doctors
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doctor
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doctors
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suffer from
stress related
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illness
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%, 8%, 10%, 11% and 15%, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words group, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • analogy
  • correlation
  • data-driven
  • discernible trends
  • discrepancy
  • empirical evidence
  • fluctuations
  • longitudinal study
  • meticulously
  • percentile
  • predominantly
  • quantitative analysis
  • spectrum
  • statistical significance
  • threshold
  • variances
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