The given bar chart illustrates the ratio of household who lived in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

The given bar chart illustrates the ratio of household who lived in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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This
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bar graph provides information regarding
percentage
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the percentage
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of
household
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households
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accodring
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according
to contracting in England and
wales
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Wales
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form
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from
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1918 to 2011.
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with, the
people
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number of people
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who lived in borrowing
house
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houses
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started at around 78% and decreased gradually, reaching nearly 31% in 2001. After that, its proportion experienced
small
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a small
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rising
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to around 37%.
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next,
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the households in owning started at around 22% in 1918, and was on
the
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apply
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growth to around 65% with small fluctuations in 2011. To be specific, the two types of households met in 1971, reaching 50% respectively and experienced each
variations
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.
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, the figure increased to
appproximately
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approximately
68 in 2001 and decreased by around 5% to around 43% in 2011.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeownership rates
  • economic factors
  • recessions
  • inflation
  • generational changes
  • housing market evolution
  • post-war periods
  • demographic shifts
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • housing policies
  • housing preferences
  • housing demands
  • accessibility
  • accommodation
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