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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal berween 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal berween 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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 graph illustrates
average
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 Carbon dioxide emissions by
a
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 individual person in various European countries
about
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 40 years time
period
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.
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,the UK and
Sweden
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 graphs are downtrend,
while
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 Italy and Portugal graphs are uptrend. In 1967,the United Kingdom was the highest CO2 emission country at almost 11 metric
tonnes
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 and
Sweden
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 was the second highest
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on
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around
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 9 metric
tonnes
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,which was double
than
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Italy
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of Italy
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(over 4 metric
tonnes
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) and forth times bigger than Portugal.The UK carbon emission decreased gradually and ended up at nearly 9 metric
tonnes
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Sweden
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 graph decreased dramatically and closed under 6 metric
tonnes
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,Italy's trend
line
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 increased
steadly
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steadily
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 over the
period
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 of time and finished
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 8 metric
tonnes
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,which was nearly double than starting point.
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,Italy finished the
period
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at
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second
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the second
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period
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.Portugal started the journey with
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 lowest point among the countries,but gradually increased
line
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 ended the journey near about 6 metric
tonnes
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along with
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Sweden
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's
line
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, period, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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