The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table displays
players
from ten various countries who won Olympic
medals
(Gold, Silver and Bronze) in London in the year 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that
players
from United had the highest number of
medals
in three categories,
while
Hungary had the lowest.
To begin
with, American
players
won 46 gold, 29 silver and bronze
medals
each other. It is 104
medals
of the total and it was the most (successful)
than
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others.
In contrast
, Hungary won 17
medals
of the total, representing 8, 4 and 5 respectively.
Moreover
,
Chinese
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was
second
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country
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medals
, accounting for 88. Looking at the details, South
Korean
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and Italy won 28
medals
.
Additionally
,
players
from Russia won the most bronze
medals
, accounting for 32. It was
more
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nearly three times more than Italy.
Finally
, Australians won 35
medals
, winning 7 golds, 16 silvers and 12 bronzes.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words players, medals with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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