The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table displays

players

from ten various countries who won Olympic

medals

(Gold, Silver and Bronze) in London in the year 2012.

Overall

, it can be seen that

players

from United had the highest number of

medals

in three categories,

while

Hungary had the lowest.

To begin

with, American

players

won 46 gold, 29 silver and bronze

medals

each other. It is 104

medals

of the total and it was the most (successful)

than

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others.

In contrast

, Hungary won 17

medals

of the total, representing 8, 4 and 5 respectively.

Moreover

Chinese

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the Chinese

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was

second

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the second

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country

in winning

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to win

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medals

, accounting for 88. Looking at the details, South

Korean

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Korea

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and Italy won 28

medals

Additionally

players

from Russia won the most bronze

medals

, accounting for 32. It was

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apply

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nearly three times more than Italy.

Finally

, Australians won 35

medals

, winning 7 golds, 16 silvers and 12 bronzes.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

146 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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It is generally observed that almost all high level jobs are done by men. Does it mean that the government should encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? Do you agree or disagree with this proposition.