The table below shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table displays
players
from ten various countries who won Olympic medals
(Gold, Silver and Bronze) in London in the year 2012. Overall
, it can be seen that players
from United had the highest number of medals
in three categories, while
Hungary had the lowest.
To begin
with, American players
won 46 gold, 29 silver and bronze medals
each other. It is 104 medals
of the total and it was the most (successful) than
others. Change preposition
apply
In contrast
, Hungary won 17 medals
of the total, representing 8, 4 and 5 respectively. Moreover
, Chinese
was Correct article usage
the Chinese
second
country Change the article
the second
in winning
Change preposition
to win
medals
, accounting for 88.
Looking at the details, South Korean
and Italy won 28 Correct your spelling
Korea
medals
. Additionally
, players
from Russia won the most bronze medals
, accounting for 32. It was more
nearly three times more than Italy. Correct quantifier usage
apply
Finally
, Australians won 35 medals
, winning 7 golds, 16 silvers and 12 bronzes.Submitted by ab.ciyani on
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